I decided to stay with the topic of polygamy because some students seemed interested with the topic of polygamy when they were reading my essay. I took a different approach after getting the student’s comments. I changed my introduction and included a polygamist woman Carolyn, some of her story. I felt that including a character will make polygamy seem more personal and real to the readers.
The second paragraph includes the lack of human rights a woman has in polygamy and I then provided an example. There are many examples of this lack of a woman’s rights, but I decided to just choose one. I then included facts about laws being given to prohibit polygamy. However, unfortunately people still practice it. My next paragraph includes how polygamy began and why. Many people argue that polygamy should be outlawed because many people in the Old Testament had many wives. I found passages from the Bible that states this, but I feel if I included these quotes my essay wouldn’t be about explaining a concept. But I’m not sure.
Many people look at polygamy in a negative way, and the majority of people don’t agree with or like this practice. But there are those that practice this and hold polygamy very close to their hearts. I feel if maybe I included the other side of the people who love practicing this then my essay would be longer, and clearer as I compare the two sides. I talked a lot about in this essay about a woman in polygamy and what she has to go through instead of men. I thought about including a male side, but thought women are the one’s who are being affected by this practice the most. I didn’t want my essay to drag on and on because I feel too much information on this subject can get the reader bored. In the last paragraph I talked about how many women want to leave, but a lot of them can’t. However, there are those who have escaped from this practice.
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